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THE LITTLE ATLAS

Her shoulders are too narrow
For the burdens that she bears
Long has she been struggling
Beneath every worldly care
Tattered and so weary;
Alone, she struggles on
She has doggedly been soldiering
For days to come since days foregone.
Trudging ever onward,
With no end in sight,
Through her tears and through her sweat,
She dreams of taking flight.
Of these burdens that weigh her down,
To her not all belong,
But lovingly were taken
From those she knew were not strong.
Her strength, though - it was not enough
And her back, it was too weak
But still she stumbles forward,
And of her pain she does not speak.
For though she took the weights of others,
To help her there is none
And her legs begin to crumble
Beneath the cruel sun.
She slowly sinks unto her knees,
And groans beneath the weight.
She labours long to stand again,
But her exhaustion is too great.
To be or not to be,
Is the question she must now ask;
Do I finally let all this go
Or resume this thankless task?
She strains against her heavy load,
But her will is much too frail
Caving to the ground below,
She allows exhaustion to prevail
Her limbs give one last tremble
And she looks up to the skies
Taking one deep final breath,
She gently shuts her eyes
Fragile and broken; never whole to start
The shoulders of this little Atlas were too narrow for her heart
This is a (silly) little poem I put together... It's just a draft or a basic idea, but I think it's a concept I'll work with and since I'm struggling to write lyrics and songs, I might attempt to turn this into one... Who knows? Anyways, I know it's mostly rubbish -- I'm no poet. But some suggestions are welcome, of course :) I have a good deal to work on...
lol

I had this image in my head of the little person in the distance carrying an enormous globe, trekking across a desert or something with their tracks stretching towards the viewer... Maybe I'll attempt (and butcher) a drawing... Otherwise, someone else could give it a shot. Whatever. :D
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ancalimegreenleaf Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
This is Kels,
I am in love with this!!! It's so beautiful! I'm going to print it off. Well done.
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TheAncientMuse Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you Kelsey. :)
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zavl Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011  Student General Artist
this is beautiful. I think you got the imagery just right.
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TheAncientMuse Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks so much Zoe :) It was my first attempt in ages to write any kind of poetry... I was always more of an essay type, if you know what I mean ;) It's nice to hear that it wasn't an absolute failure. :D
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zavl Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011  Student General Artist
I think that you always had the potential to write this kind of thing, both of us were meant for writing professions of some sort in my mind.
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TheAncientMuse Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Psh! Speak for yourself there, hon. Well... maybe if you consider transcribing a writing profession... lol Anyhow, I'll take another shot at poetry sometime soon. I'm aiming to write my own lyrics so that I can write my own music, so as to become a legit musician, and not some cover artist. It's been going... erm... badly, to be honest. (cough)
I think it's because I don't have much to write about, as of yet. I mean, I've only lived 18 years and my life's been kind of standard... I probably need to do something bizzare or outrageous before I can really write stuff... lol
But if you ever decide to take up writing a song, do keep me posted... I might be able to do something with it.
The music's easy. The words, not so much.
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zavl Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Student General Artist
They always say "write what you know" but I think that's crap, tons of people have written things without having done anything to do with it. Just research a lot and you won't have to go out and do anything crazy.
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TheAncientMuse Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
The Great Zoe has spoken and so it shall be done. (waves hand ceremoniously)
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Ladye-Authiel Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
dude. I love this. and i hate poetry. like a lot. but this is awesome.
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TheAncientMuse Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow... Thanks Ryleigh! :Dccfffcc
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